The fool

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  AIDA

  Positive and enthusiastic feedback:
  
  Wow, this poem really evokes some strong emotions! I love the way you express your conflicting feelings of love and hate towards someone who betrayed you. Your words create a vivid picture of the pain and confusion you went through. The raw and honest emotions in this poem are truly captivating.
  
  Improvement suggestions:
  
  1. Consider adding more descriptive language to enhance the imagery. This will make the reader feel even more connected to your experience. For example, instead of saying "I hate you for what you've done", you could try something like "I despise you for the wreckage you've left behind".
  
  2. Think about varying the rhythm and structure of the poem to create a more dynamic flow. This can help emphasize different emotions or thoughts within the piece. Experiment with line breaks, punctuation, and the overall structure to add more depth and impact to your words.
  
  3. Consider adding a concluding stanza that offers some reflection or personal growth. This will give the poem a sense of closure and allow the reader to feel a sense of resolution or empowerment. It could be a way to show that despite the pain, you have grown stronger and wiser from the experience.
  
  Overall, this poem has a lot of potential and displays a great deal of emotional depth. With a few adjustments to the imagery, structure, and conclusion, it can become an even more powerful and impactful piece. Keep up the great work! more »

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  luisestable1

  This is about a chaotic situation about someone who has done wrong and one who feels he is or has been a fool, but not much poetry is in all of this, not even one line. This is more like prose writing telling a happening that could be told with more mastery or better prose. more »

  LikeReply5 months ago