Analysis of Abandoned



I watch their time
Tick-Tock
As they get close to the end of the clock
Their faces are always scrunched in worry
of what will become of me
when they depart from this earth.

What will become of me ?
Huh?
Mother ..
But you don't care
Out there dancing to each and every tune of the playlist
I guess you don't miss the baby
YOU popped out your belly
and just like that
YOU popped me out your life
Like a pimple so simple
yet holding you back

Mom ..
I've grown
yet
I don't own a single nickname from you
I guess the city lights are too bright
that you've lost your eyesight.
Have you lost the directions to come back home?

Granny talks about you mom
From day to noon
Your childhood stories
Mom
What happened to the girl granny talks about?
Mom ..at nine months you left me
When I had yet to still master the works of breathing .

Every birthday
 I thought you would show up
and tell me just why you left us
Left me at the mercy of cold
The coldness in my heart
the emptiness.

But
I know wherever you are
As you dance and laugh
like you've got everything alright.
You will always see me at the back of your mind
YOUR child you left
for the world to raise


Scheme xaabbx bxxxcbbcxxx Dxcxccx dxxDcbx cxecce cxxcccx
Poetic Form
Metre 1111 11 1111101101 110111010 1110111 1101111 110111 1 10 1111 11101101001101 11111010 111110 0111 111111 1010110 11011 1 11 1 111010111 110101111 11111 11100101111 1010111 1111 1110 1 11010110101 1111111 1111111001110 1001 111111 01111111 11101011 010011 0100 1 1101011 11101 111101 11111101111 1111 10111
Closest metre Iambic trimeter
Characters 1,168
Words 256
Sentences 13
Stanzas 6
Stanza Lengths 6, 11, 7, 7, 6, 7
Lines Amount 44
Letters per line (avg) 20
Words per line (avg) 5
Letters per stanza (avg) 149
Words per stanza (avg) 38

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Words of a child left to fend for herself

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Written on December 26, 2022

Submitted by rutzmabika2 on January 29, 2023

Modified on March 14, 2023

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